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Cold windless nights
Catches my hand in yours
Holding on
Like an umbrella in a rainstorm

With fingers not so smooth
Yet not so rough
Intertwined around an
Apple-scented hand

Holding tight like a five-year old
Clutching on handlebars
Afraid to fall
Not wanting to let go. Proud

Like the touch of caramel
Warm and comforting
Five soothing fingers
That can't let go
©2004-2009 ~j0ysha
:iconj0ysha:

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I took a Creative Writing class and one of the assignments was to write a romantic poetry. This was the closest I can think of.

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:iconwhen-it-rains:
there are two really poerful lines in this:
'like an umbrella in a rainstorm'
and
'that can't let go.'

very nice work.

--
in the end, only kindness matters.
:couch:

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:iconj0ysha:
Thanks. My personal favorite line was actually the apple-scented hand haha...
:icon2worthless:
that is some amazing imagery
:iconfreetaxiride:
"that can't let go", good line. i also love the preview :nana:

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Hodie mihi, cras tibi.
:iconj0ysha:
thanks. a lot of people seem to like that line a lot.
:iconj0ysha:
the poem or the picture? haha thanks anyway :)
:iconnuppu:
Oh, it was so romantic! Cute, very cute... :heart: I liked it. ^_^
:icondonotkilldemons:
Ooh, not bad actually! Holding hands always hides something great, powerful and very private. And that's also something while what you can feel proud. thanks.

--
Morning will come. Just pray you're there to see it.
:iconselene-vampire:
Very nice. I love how you took something so seemingly simple and turned it into an amazing poem with great imagery. Keep up the great work.

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